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Pytanie: Just a little story called Soul Protector?
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Answer #1:
It cut off again for ya Bliss :)Heeey, we took turns, even steven, you started the first story, I started this story. BUT! .... you're next ;) You have NO idea how hard it was to write this one. I HATE starting a story from scratch. I have no idea what will happen, I literally have to see it in my head first, and then to make it realistic or interesting and keep it short, I went NUTS! I sat at my computer during lunch at work no less, and sat there with my head in my hands and tried to close my eyes and it took well past lunch to envision something. It was hard! So honestly I think you have a gift in coming up with ideas, I am much more comfortable going with or embellishing upon something roughly written :) But I will definitely take turns with you because it's good practice, as hard as it might be. I think it's because I get so tired of it after the first round that I have a hard time finding the energy for any accuracy or detail (hence me trying to do it all in my head FIRST before I even start writing)
I DEFINITELY like your touch! I definitely enjoyed the parts you cleaned up! Just ONE thing I noticed.... your spelling of "latter", aka "ladder", but that's just something small. I'm curious to see if you did anything to the end? ANy fixes or cleanups?
I think you're right about the ages.... maybe I can change them to 17? Take out the skipping? Make Ashley fishing with a real fishing rod, but trying to hook snacks that mom left under the tree? Something more grown up? They can still be innocent.
UPDATE:
I had posted the latest version but then I felt like cleaning it more :) I kept the age at 14 but I made her fishing with a real pole. Here are some exerpts:
"Across the street, Ashley was playing in her tree house, using her dad’s fishing pole to hook small bags of Pepperidge Farm Goldfish her mom left for her under the shade of the huge tree. She perched herself on a small wooden platform that was constructed on one of the large branches supporting the tree house. Charlie strolled into the backyard and waved up at Ashley covering his eyes from the sun while adjusting his sight to see Ashley under the shade of the tree."
"For as long as he could remember, Charlie had a crush on her, but only his grandparents knew. He was too afraid to risk changing their perfect friendship. "
"The photo pictured his grandfather and himself when he was maybe ten-years-old, pausing for a break on their hike along a wooded path of the Appalachian Trail. This was his most cherished and favorite picture of them together. It was the doorway. On the other side, Charley - and Ashley, would be protected. He knew what he had to do and he had to do it quickly. "
I didn't feel like we should explain it too much, to another plane, I want to keep it mysterious and let people use their imagination. It's a doorway, they'll be safe, that's all they need to know. The end sort of gives a better picture of the storyline.
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